Raito's not so creative world
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Raito's not so creative world
ehm....well as the title say ! i write....ehm ...poems! and well i don't find them pretty good but i still write them anyway
(it's a hobby) okay well because i wasn't into writin and stuff as much as now i forgot to write them on paper or save them so i don't have many to put here! but do not be afraid it's summer and i have extra load of time ! anyway enough talking !
even if the rain kept me away ...
i will kneel and pray ....
GOD.......wash the rain far away ...
even if i become deff and can't hear ........
i will look at her and say :
GOD...... thank you for this music in my ear...
even if i become blind and can't see
i will look at the sky and say :
GOD...... i don't care if i can't see just leave her here with me
even if my time come's to fade away ......
with my last breath i would say :
GOD ...... why heaven if i can't stay?

Even If
even if the rain kept me away ...
i will kneel and pray ....
GOD.......wash the rain far away ...
even if i become deff and can't hear ........
i will look at her and say :
GOD...... thank you for this music in my ear...
even if i become blind and can't see
i will look at the sky and say :
GOD...... i don't care if i can't see just leave her here with me
even if my time come's to fade away ......
with my last breath i would say :
GOD ...... why heaven if i can't stay?
Last edited by Raito on Wed Aug 12, 2009 10:43 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Re: Raito's not so creative world
congrats about creating a thread here at creators corner
well it is well organized but it looks short ... is it complete or the is other parts you'll put later on ?
well there are a lot of mistakes but if you keep writing you'll improve your skills for sure

well it is well organized but it looks short ... is it complete or the is other parts you'll put later on ?
well there are a lot of mistakes but if you keep writing you'll improve your skills for sure

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Re: Raito's not so creative world
Nice work on the poem. Even though I'm not too keen with poem, I think it's quite okay
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